That first makes me squee in ways that you, eh, probably don't find that difficult to believe. *grin* It's lovely, and I do love that hobbity resilience -- especially here, Once they wake up --and all three of them wake up within two days-- they're on their feet immediately. Merry marvels at such quick recovery after two weeks when nothing seemed to improve at all. He walks close to Pippin and keeps expecting his cousin to lean on him, to need him; but Pippin's stride is steady, his face is full of laughter, as always, and Merry feels guilty that he can't stop feeling sad. Frodo and Sam lean on each other, and Merry feels altogether useless.: not that Merry feeling useless is lovely, or him feeling sad, either, but we all know that it ends up all very well. Anyhow, that paragraph is easy and light and I do love its flow.
And then there was a kiss, and I was very happy. Yey.
That second -- that exchange between Gandalf and Frodo -- that kind of hurts my heart. But it's a good sort of hurt, I should add -- the sort of hurt you'd want it to be, when you feel that its gone and broken your heart.
I mean: Frodo hesitated for only a moment and then spoke firmly. "No, Gandalf," he said. "Let those who had to carry arms in this fight carry them again tonight, and let them be honored for it, but this was not my part. I had to carry only the Ring," and failed even at that, he thought, as words suddenly abandoned him again.
Oh, Frodo.
And the third -- now, Casey and Zeke are not at all my "thing", but I like the characters and I liked this, too because, ow, that is really powerful. And it's a part of something bigger? I think, when you get it posted, I'll have to give it a look. One of my fandom resolutions is, you see, that I should try new more things. *grin*
Also, this is the second feedback I've given this year and possibly bigger than any I gave in the whole of 2005. I'm off to a good start, then. *hug!*
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Once they wake up --and all three of them wake up within two days-- they're on their feet immediately. Merry marvels at such quick recovery after two weeks when nothing seemed to improve at all. He walks close to Pippin and keeps expecting his cousin to lean on him, to need him; but Pippin's stride is steady, his face is full of laughter, as always, and Merry feels guilty that he can't stop feeling sad. Frodo and Sam lean on each other, and Merry feels altogether useless.: not that Merry feeling useless is lovely, or him feeling sad, either, but we all know that it ends up all very well. Anyhow, that paragraph is easy and light and I do love its flow.
And then there was a kiss, and I was very happy. Yey.
That second -- that exchange between Gandalf and Frodo -- that kind of hurts my heart. But it's a good sort of hurt, I should add -- the sort of hurt you'd want it to be, when you feel that its gone and broken your heart.
I mean:
Frodo hesitated for only a moment and then spoke firmly. "No, Gandalf," he said. "Let those who had to carry arms in this fight carry them again tonight, and let them be honored for it, but this was not my part. I had to carry only the Ring," and failed even at that, he thought, as words suddenly abandoned him again.
Oh, Frodo.
And the third -- now, Casey and Zeke are not at all my "thing", but I like the characters and I liked this, too because, ow, that is really powerful. And it's a part of something bigger? I think, when you get it posted, I'll have to give it a look. One of my fandom resolutions is, you see, that I should try new more things. *grin*
Also, this is the second feedback I've given this year and possibly bigger than any I gave in the whole of 2005. I'm off to a good start, then. *hug!*