ext_16748 ([identity profile] layne67.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sophinisba 2006-03-23 03:09 am (UTC)

Sophi darling, this is perfect. There's no other word for it. Exactly what I had in mind but couldn't put into words. You did it so beautifully too. I love everything about this fic but this for some reason, this part is my favourite :

Casey was acting like the sullen teenager he was and the first words that came into Zeke's mind at that moment were Don't "whatever" me, young man, and he actually had to laugh at himself rather than say them out loud.

And the best thing is that you didn't have to actually write what Zeke was thinking at that particular moment, we just knew. I think [livejournal.com profile] abby_normal summed it best when she said not much happens but an awful lot is said and even more is unsaid. Subtle foreshadowing with plenty of room and opportunity for future additions.

A sequel, for my next birthday perhaps?

*makes puppy dog eyes*

I love this Sophi. Thank you!!!!





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